Development
Film Development; 22.47 seconds; needs development through narrative. Perhaps more diverse shots of makeup application. Need's more of a narrative; p erhaps a narrative focused on a breakup, or the development of emotions within a breakup. Third shot is cut too quick; needs a shot between two and three to aid transitioning of shots. Fourth, and dancing shots, are too early. Needs slower paced shots, perhaps with a larger frame to avoid a claustrophobic feel to the film. Multiple shots to be intwined between third and fourth shot. Need to aid narrative; additional establishing shots of character, placing record onto turntable? fumbling through a bag? Potential title; Haploid. Jefferson Airplane - Today; played during introduction. April Come She Will Scarborough Fair. Progress to walking scenes of contemplation; outside shots around park. Influenced by 'The Graduate'. Following shot of protagonist walking; single take shot, from side, of walking. Incl