Development
Film Development;
22.47 seconds; needs development through narrative. Perhaps more diverse shots of makeup application.
Need's more of a narrative; perhaps a narrative focused on a breakup, or the development of emotions within a breakup.
Third shot is cut too quick; needs a shot between two and three to aid transitioning of shots.
Fourth, and dancing shots, are too early. Needs slower paced shots, perhaps with a larger frame to avoid a claustrophobic feel to the film.
Multiple shots to be intwined between third and fourth shot.
Need to aid narrative; additional establishing shots of character, placing record onto turntable? fumbling through a bag?
Potential title; Haploid.
Jefferson Airplane - Today; played during introduction.
April Come She Will
Scarborough Fair.
Progress to walking scenes of contemplation; outside shots around park. Influenced by 'The Graduate'.
Following shot of protagonist walking; single take shot, from side, of walking. Include objects in foreground of shot.
Filmed through shallow focus. Shot to represent progression of characters emotions.
22.47 seconds; needs development through narrative. Perhaps more diverse shots of makeup application.
Need's more of a narrative; perhaps a narrative focused on a breakup, or the development of emotions within a breakup.
Third shot is cut too quick; needs a shot between two and three to aid transitioning of shots.
Fourth, and dancing shots, are too early. Needs slower paced shots, perhaps with a larger frame to avoid a claustrophobic feel to the film.
Multiple shots to be intwined between third and fourth shot.
Need to aid narrative; additional establishing shots of character, placing record onto turntable? fumbling through a bag?
Potential title; Haploid.
Jefferson Airplane - Today; played during introduction.
April Come She Will
Scarborough Fair.
Progress to walking scenes of contemplation; outside shots around park. Influenced by 'The Graduate'.
Following shot of protagonist walking; single take shot, from side, of walking. Include objects in foreground of shot.
Filmed through shallow focus. Shot to represent progression of characters emotions.
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