Development

Film Development; 

22.47 seconds; needs development through narrative. Perhaps more diverse shots of makeup application. 
Need's more of a narrative; perhaps a narrative focused on a breakup, or the development of emotions within a breakup.

Third shot is cut too quick; needs a shot between two and three to aid transitioning of shots. 
Fourth, and dancing shots, are too early. Needs slower paced shots, perhaps with a larger frame to avoid a claustrophobic feel to the film. 

Multiple shots to be intwined between third and fourth shot. 
Need to aid narrative; additional establishing shots of character, placing record onto turntable? fumbling through a bag?

Potential title; Haploid.
Jefferson Airplane - Today; played during introduction.
April Come She Will
Scarborough Fair.

Progress to walking scenes of contemplation; outside shots around park. Influenced by 'The Graduate'. 
Following shot of protagonist walking; single take shot, from side, of walking. Include objects in foreground of shot. 
Filmed through shallow focus. Shot to represent progression of characters emotions. 



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